Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle)

13ubba · 08-20-2008, 11:51 AM

Iam On Top Im Looking Down
At You Nigggas Flop Ha!
That wassup There is No Hope
Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA!

But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

billgatz · 08-20-2008, 12:31 PM

this shit needs some soap... wow woops

*Pistol Banger* · 08-20-2008, 01:07 PM

Die Slow Pop A Pill

Jay-T · 08-20-2008, 01:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 13ubba

Iam On Top Im Looking Down
At You Nigggas Flop Ha!
That wassup There is No Hope
Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA!

But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

LMAO...

Shogun · 08-20-2008, 01:25 PM

If you're being serious: you know this is not good. You need to write, write, write & write some more. Don't post another "freestyle" until you think that it is approaching "good". Then we'll see if you've improved.

Practice doesn't make perfect itself; you need to have other attributes. However, enough practice could see you approach mediocre. Good luck.

13ubba · 08-20-2008, 01:37 PM

Ye I No Lol Lmao I have to write more this just Medicore Itsz 1st one ever just give it more tyme im practicing everyday so itsz all good

*Pistol Banger* · 08-20-2008, 01:48 PM

Lmao At People Leaving Feed When he Dropped 2 Bars.

Shogun · 08-20-2008, 01:56 PM

It's a lot worse than mediocre.

And hey, 2 bars means he might be young. In that case, he's going to need a mentor. Tell me 13ubba, do you like ponies &/or sugary treats?

T0M CH4MBERS · 08-20-2008, 06:29 PM

^who doesn't?

*Pistol Banger* · 08-20-2008, 11:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by T0M CH4MBERS

^who doesn't?

Co-Sign

youngking187 · 08-21-2008, 01:48 AM

these two bars better then my
full verses...........

UnBrEaKaBlE · 08-21-2008, 04:34 AM

why are people even commening on this? his shit wasnt even a full two bars, let alone that shit didnt even rhyme? i mean are you mentally retarded? why would you ever even think about posting this?

08-20-2008, 11:51 AM	#1
13ubba Veteran Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: canada Posts: 1,300 Thanks: 14 Thanked 242 Times in 28 Posts	Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle) Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle) Iam On Top Im Looking Down At You Nigggas Flop Ha! That wassup There is No Hope Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA! But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

08-20-2008, 01:07 PM	#3
Pistol Banger --MaSteRMiNdiN-- Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 3,830 Thanks: 69 Thanked 170 Times in 48 Posts	Die Slow Pop A Pill __________________ We Can Run, But We Can't Hide Forever. . It's Deep. . The System Has The Masses Asleep, Religion's Meaning Is To Lie & Rely On Deceit, They Putting Chemicals In The Food We Eat, Polluting Waters Cause Slaughter To Sheep, We The Meek.

08-20-2008, 01:48 PM	#7
Pistol Banger --MaSteRMiNdiN-- Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 3,830 Thanks: 69 Thanked 170 Times in 48 Posts	Lmao At People Leaving Feed When he Dropped 2 Bars. __________________ We Can Run, But We Can't Hide Forever. . It's Deep. . The System Has The Masses Asleep, Religion's Meaning Is To Lie & Rely On Deceit, They Putting Chemicals In The Food We Eat, Polluting Waters Cause Slaughter To Sheep, We The Meek.

08-20-2008, 06:29 PM	#9
T0M CH4MBERS AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 9,089 Thanks: 67 Thanked 88 Times in 50 Posts	^who doesn't? __________________ D Minus says: u just mad cuz ima be cakin and it wont hurt when i take a huge shit...being broke with a tight asshole aint doin shit for me right now yo!

08-21-2008, 01:48 AM	#11
youngking187 www.myspace.com/kingro202 Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 1,229 Thanks: 87 Thanked 225 Times in 53 Posts	these two bars better then my full verses........... __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

08-20-2008, 12:31 PM	#2
billgatz Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Queens Bridge USA Posts: 31 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	this shit needs some soap... wow woops

08-20-2008, 01:25 PM	#5
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 644 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 1 Post	If you're being serious: you know this is not good. You need to write, write, write & write some more. Don't post another "freestyle" until you think that it is approaching "good". Then we'll see if you've improved. Practice doesn't make perfect itself; you need to have other attributes. However, enough practice could see you approach mediocre. Good luck.

08-20-2008, 01:37 PM	#6
13ubba Veteran Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: canada Posts: 1,300 Thanks: 14 Thanked 242 Times in 28 Posts	Ye I No Lol Lmao I have to write more this just Medicore Itsz 1st one ever just give it more tyme im practicing everyday so itsz all good

08-20-2008, 01:56 PM	#8
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 644 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 1 Post	It's a lot worse than mediocre. And hey, 2 bars means he might be young. In that case, he's going to need a mentor. Tell me 13ubba, do you like ponies &/or sugary treats?

08-21-2008, 04:34 AM	#12
UnBrEaKaBlE The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 666 Thanks: 2 Thanked 293 Times in 48 Posts	why are people even commening on this? his shit wasnt even a full two bars, let alone that shit didnt even rhyme? i mean are you mentally retarded? why would you ever even think about posting this? __________________ im loco no sunoco the flow show dat the hood kno do fo do lo ima solo cat myspace.com/therealprotege

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